The essence of time,
weaves through the mixture of life,
regardless of the recipe.
It clashes with its enemies,
and glides with its allies,
unstoppable, unrelenting, merciless.
on and on.........
A formula without the teaspoon of care,
that would be to the benefit of everyone.
With forgotten intentions,
or maybe no intentions,
a mystery to the mystical,
works as one, and only one.
...nothing more.
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5 comments:
That is really cool! It has great rhythem. The only thing I would change would be these to bits:
and glides with its allies, I would take out the AND.
or maybe no intentions,
I would either take this line out or pu t something like perhaps none or perhaps no intentions as or maybe is informal language.
GREAT JOB!
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I think that poem is really good. it made me think for a while.
woahza!
Thankls guys, i really appreciate your feedback!
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